Police sirens heard rushing through the streets
Another robbery
An ambulance racing passed cars on the freeway
Another accident
Murders, Killings, Stabings, Gangs
This all soungs like a nightmare!
Well..... its not
Its the real world.
But some people wont listen
Some wont open there eyes to their surroundings
One day we will all truly see it
But it will be to late.
Tell me what you think. Please.
Police sirens heard rushing through the streets
Another robbery
An ambulance racing passed cars on the freeway
Another accident
Murders, Killings, Stabings, Gangs
This all soungs like a nightmare!
Well..... its not
Its the real world.
But some people wont listen
Some wont open there eyes to their surroundings
One day we will all truly see it
But it will be to late.
Tell me what you think. Please.
its good
It reminds me a little of Bruce Dawe - Accident and Ambulance Siren
you should read it
erm... erm... erm.
it's nice. jst keep workin at it miss.
exactly what i think of life its wonderful :)
Its really good, but I think it needs more....more as in you need to tell more details.
its good(:
It's okay but needs improvement. Just keep on writing and you'll get better
thats really good :)
thats really good :)
Not bad, I'll just say you have to fix some things here and there. Keep writing, ask someone who has a history in literature or something, they may be able to help you.
wow thats kewl
Really Great!!
well its a poem. i guess. When i started writing it I didnt mean for it to be a poem but thats what it turned out to be.
Not to bad keep at it and the more you write the better you'll be. I been writing since I was and can write a whole song in 15-30 minutes, sometimes even less. It'll get to a point when you'll just sit to write and stuff just comes out.
sounds like the place where i live. use to wonderful. now,it got GHETTO. i don't know how..maybe cause of budget cuts.they're cutting polices from their jobs.. :(
it's great, only 1 question, is it a verse from a song, a poem or what?