hi i wrote this song and wanted to know what people think. ive writen others but this is the 1st one i've put on here. if its crap then tell me so i can improve it or strat over. and what should i change? (by the way if there is spelling mistakes, sorry. I cant spell to save my life)
ALIVE
I sacrificed my life for you/ but you never said thankyou/ you dicided my fate/ running around for you/ but so far you lost in your lies/ your feet in your shoes are just, running away from truth.
Chorus - But since your gone/i've never felt so Alive/dead of my dispise/ cuz when you hit you hit real hard/ but now thats gone im like...
The dreams go further than i thought they would/ when i broke free from no hope and misery/ it was a million miles away/but who said?/ the impossible is possible/not you, you never cared or gave a damn about/ dreams and wished, hopes and lies/playing the blame game
CHORUS
it was hard at first/ thought id have to go back/ but the light at the end of the tunnel came closer to me/ you became a speck of dust/ hard for me to find/ you dissapeard, day by day
Since your gone/ ive never felt so alive/ dead of my dispise but now thats gone/ ive never felt so alive/ dead of my dispise/cuz when you hit you hit real hard at first/ thought id have to go back/ but the light at the end of the tunnel came closer to me? you became a speack of dust/ hard for me to find/ you dissapeared, day by day...
Thats it. tell my what you think. it still needs work on the ending and stuff though. :)
hey its awesome nice work!!
awesome u get a thumbs up and a pat on the back! i like the song story of my life
awesome!!! your song is really good =)
hey, thanx everyone that commented on my song. it means alot. :) glad you all liked it. i still think it could be better and im trying to get a better ending. thanx again x
good song
awesome i loved it
I agree with Katlyn.
As song as awesome as this can be plagiarized.
Nice work. Keep it up. :)
nice, but watch out. someone might try to steal it.
it sounds nice. is it about some1 specific? btw u might want 2 check some spelling.
WOW :)
I love it !
pretty good! is it supposed to be fast or slow?
I like the kinda deep dark lyrics THIS IS GREAT!:)
very good! a few spelling errors like you said there would be, but otherwise, well done.
nice..very nice..:D
I like it. I like the chorus. It's so catchy =)
i would totaly sing this for you!!! that is unless you can sing lol my dream is to become a singer and not to sound self senterd but im realy good! well thats what my friends say... haha talk to me!! heres my profile URL http://www.paramore.net/member/i/299690/
that was awesomee! haha, i feel ashamed of my writing now! haha. but it was great: )
that is so good. you sholud make a video of you singing and post it
its great
you totally rock!! i could never write a song!
I liked it!
i love it! you're awesome :)
Do you have any music for it?
awesome my friend :0