This is a poem I wrote, and I wanted to know what you thought. If you hate it, comment anyways. It wasn't really supposed to ryme, but some of it ended up ryming anywyas, i just let it flow. So, tell me what you think please?
The Forest Of Stone
In the forest made of stone
There are eyes unseen
Staring, staring, staring at you
Glowing red in the dim light
In the forest made of stone
Run and hide, if you dare
Or Face the Challenges that are there
In this dark deep dank forest of secrets
The forest made of stone
The stone is not what to be feared
Its what lies inside
The nothingness of this forest will haunt you
Until the day you die
Unless you run, before its too late
Get out of this hell
This dark unfeeling place
Known as the forest of stone
Stone hearts
Stone minds
Unmoving
No breath
So still
In the forest
Known as the Forest of Stone
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constructive critism please? Thanks :)
that's pretty good :D
nice...
Brilliant, well done!
wow, its a really beatiful poem! really! i think you should keep going with this!
and by the way, if you write more poems, please please post them on my profile! they are really great. :)
you repeat things alot but it was nice not great
Stone hearts
Stone minds
Unmoving
No breath
So still
i love that. hell, i love the whole thing.
a little concrit, some of it is redundant, like you say the same thing a couple of times. maybe that was your intention, but if it was, make it a little more coherent. :)
like. actually love. this is deep, and extremely amazing. jusss sayin.
Dude, this is REALLY good!
wicked, dude sounds like the kind of poem i would write :)
its awesome, ndai, all of ur stuff is cool!!!!!
i think its great.
i like it
anyone?